Friday, October 19, 2012

Spanner Chapter 11: Everybody's Talkin' 'Bout (Revision 4)

Chapter 10

Chaos Angel Spanner — Book 1: Rock City Blues
Chapter 11: Everybody’s Talkin’ ’Bout (Revision 4)

People have come to believe that Shira defeated Minty in last night’s song war. But now her classmate Nancy, never the most stable student at Bangor High, has gone mad: Leila must die for her ’ship! Oliver has also decided Leila must die, and he may have done something to Nancy. So Leila brings Team Bremelo and the Slasher Hunters together to deal with Oliver. Meanwhile, Nancy’s psychosis is becoming an embarrassment to the Student Council, so they try to come up a way to deal with her themselves...

Table of Contents:
  1. Dream Love Babylon (August 5, 2011, Final Revision 10/1/12)
  2. Psycho Fangirls (August 6, 2011, Final Revision 10/3/12)
  3. Let’s Make a Deal (August 7, 2011, Final Revision 10/5/12)
  4. Lead Us Not (August 8, 2011, Final Revision 10/8/12)
  5. Crash the Murder Party (August 9, 2011, Final Revision 10/10/12)
  6. Friday Night Slumber Party (August 10, 2011, Final Revision 10/12/12)
  7. Interlude 8: Rebel, Rebel (November 2, 2012)
The original introduction and revision notes:
First Revision: Now three episodes into the middle “light novel” of Spanner Series One, Shira faces a huge offer from the biggest rap tycoon in the Fashion-Industrial Complex, Leila seeks revenge against the serial killer her grandfather Governor Brinkman is still trying to force her to marry, her beautiful twin brother Rob finds himself facing his most psycho fans, and Shira and Leila so intensify their already intense love affair that they threaten to provoke the Law itself. Then Jennifer brings all her female friends to her house for some hardcore female bonding when tragedy strikes...

Second Revision Update: This is the first full chapter I’ve written during the 2010 edition of NaNoFiMo (National Novel Finishing Month), the writing month that follows NaNoWriMo. There are two scenarios here from earlier: the sleepover scene, heavily modified from the original scenario I recorded in the early-’00s Project Notebooks; and the serial killer scene that came to me after Steve Irwin’s death, now the climax to a complete sequence combined with another post-notebook scenario involving a school clique of outcasts latching onto a serial killer, and featuring not only the plucking of the knife and the ensuing quip from Shira, but also NaNoWriMo’s infamous Travelling Shovel of Death. Everything else is new material I wrote to fill in the plot.

This chapter introduces a new Slasher Hunter character I didn’t introduce in Chapter 8. It also introduces Marina Reyes, another of the original Team Spanner members I came up with back in 1992-5 while I still belonged to my college’s anime club; this leaves only one more Team Spanner original left before the original team is complete at last. Rap producer Jayzus dates back to 2000 or so, as do his rivals in the Wu-Tang-like rap group called the Chi-Sah Gang whom I’ll introduce later.

What’s with all the sexual incorrectness? Why do some characters don’t care about what gender one’s lover is or bother to wear their clothes at home when both are illegal and viciously punished? There’s a point to this that will be revealed later. Ever since I started plotting Spanner in 1992, the Culture War has been one of its major themes. Time to sit back and watch the war play out...

There’s now one significant change to the original chapter from the first draft, called “Bad Girls Can’t Win” (now next chapter’s title): the knife-plucking scene in the serial killer scenario has been replaced with something else entirely, connected to the new second scene of Chapter 1 part 1. Otherwise, the original intro remains fairly accurate, and the Official NaNoWriMo Travelling Shovel of Death remains...

[The Revision 2 title of this chapter was “Talk of the Town”. This is the first chapter for which there was no Third Revision.]
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