Spanner Chapter 9: The Girl You Want (Revision 3)

[Author's editing note to self: Two things begin in earnest: 1) Shira's increasingly intense sexual seduction of Leila, which causes Oliver to complain to Brinkman and is thus the ultimate cause of Chapter 15; 2) in revenge for Charmian and the mean girls' attempt to drive Leila to suicide, Shira turns their own gaslighting strategy back on them.]

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Chaos Angel Spanner — Book 1: Rock City Blues
Chapter 9: The Girl You Want (Revision 3)

Shira and Leila are in love now, and the central relationship of Spanner has finally been established. Sure enough, neither the school establishment nor the cops are able to take it well...

Third Revision Update ...much less Oliver Thorwald, the evil man to whom Leila was arranged to be married, nor her grandfather, Governor Brinkman, the clan patriarch who arranged her marriage. She belongs to Shira alone now, she defiantly tells them, and they can do nothing about it. Leila’s all-consuming love for Shira threatens the entire fabric of Conservative Revolutionary society, and it will only be a matter of time before society fights back...

Either for Shira and Leila, or for society, this will not end well.

It may be that your whole purpose in life
is simply to serve as a warning to others...

Table of Contents: (final revisions made on 10/23/11)

1. The Morning After (July 23, 2011)
2. Making Jesus Cry (July 24, 2011)
3. Spider Spins a Web (July 25, 2011)
4. Nymphetamine (July 26, 2011)
5. Eurotrash Girl (July 27, 2011)
6. Melt With You (July 28, 2011)

Here’s the introduction to the originally posted Chapter 9, then called “Checkered Pasts”. The “different name” is now the permanent name for 9.4, “Nymphetamine”. Note that I never managed to finish the first draft, since the plot imploded by the time I got to Chapters 22 and 23. First drafts sometimes do that. That’s why we edit...

Back during JulNoWriMo, I wrote this under a different name. The final title — modified from a band, not a song — fit much, much better, even if it eliminated a chapter title drop (which also happened to Chapter 3), though I made up for it in the final section. The lesson for one ex-Interpol agent and one would-be Navy ship captain is: be careful what you ask for, you might get... something completely different...

This is the last chapter I actually began writing during JulNoWriMo and AugNoWriMo. Everything that comes after this will be new — except, of course, unless I take it out of the Project Notebooks from the last decade and a half. (The beauty pageant scene is excerpted from a longer script in the Notebooks; the love scene and the morning after reappear here nearly intact.) And this is the first scheduled to be published during December 2010 — that is, during NaNoFiMo, when of course I’ll write 30,000 words for the win finish Spanner Book 1.

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